Sunday, February 28, 2010

Copy Edit the World

Original:

This offer is for a limit time. Prices, offers and some menu items may vary at participting locations and subject to changes without notice.$15.00 minimum delivery order . delivery charge may apply Copyright 2010 Via Mia Pizza. Via Via Pizza is a federally protected tradmark

Corrections:

This offer is for a limited time only. Prices and some offers may vary at participating locations and subject to change without notice.A minimum charge of $15.00 for delivery orders. Via Pizza is a federally protected trademark. Copyright 2010 via Mia Pizza.

http://viamia.com/

AP Excercise

1) The last time she played soccer, she suffered a serious injury to her knee. Sometimes it’s hard to understand why she wants to keep playing. (2)

2) He was indicted for assault, but his lawyer said, the case against him is circumstantial and she is sure the jury will exonerate him. (2)

3) He knows it isn’t kosher, but green Jell-O is his favorite dessert. This admission has prompted his friends to question both his taste and his judgment. (3)

4) Now that he has DSL, he finds it much easier to go on-line to check his e-mail and download files. (3)

5) He stood at the lectern, addressing his long time colleagues at The Knights of Columbus. (3)

Saturday, February 27, 2010

News Story # 1, 2, Fact Set # 2

News Story # 1

Around 3:00 pm yesterday afternoon, an elderly man was rescued from his burning home in San Jose, Calif.

Robert Kent, in his 50’s, suffered second and third degree burns on 50 percent of his body. He was found on the kitchen floor, unconscious in a single-story home on Annapolis Way. The fire started in the kitchen and spread to the attic. According to Captain Rob Piper there wasn’t a smoke detector. When fire fighters rescued the man, he was surrounded by flames. He was taken to Valley Medical Center, where he was listed in grave condition according to a nursing supervisor.

News Story # 2

A high-pressure gas pipe was ruptured in the South of Market area, yesterday around 12:30 pm. A private construction crew was trying to repair sewer lines; in the process they severed a two-inch underground gas pipe with a backhoe. At least 100 people were forced to leave the area, including neighborhood residents. Due to the rupture traffic was at a stand still. Businesses such as Wa-Ha-Ka restaurant lost about $ 500 worth of business in the shutdown, says manager, Samantha Feldman. “Ask my customers, they were pretty irate” said Carlann Lauria. After long hours of waiting the gas was turned back o n at 5:09 pm.

Fact Set # 2

With the help of her friends from her women’s group McCullough of Tulsa, Okla., blew all 95 candles on her cake out. This created a big cloud of smoke, setting off the smoke alarm.

“In my 23 years on the job, I’ve seen a lot of things set off a fire alarm, but I don’t think I’ve ever heard of one going off because of a birthday cake” said Fire Chief Lonnie Lamb. Though the fire fighters didn’t stay for cake, they did take photos with McCullough.

Saturday, February 20, 2010

Revision

Lead # 3B

A woman whose body was found at a public golf course last month died from accidental drowning, the San Mateo County coroner announced yesterday.


Jessica Smythe, 34, of Pacifica, was found in Sharp Park by a local hiker. According to San Mateo County coroner Robert Foster said there was nothing to indicate that Smythe's death was not accidental. He said her death was " consistent with fresh water drowning associated with probable hypthermia". Foster also added that she also had methamphetamines in her system at the time she died.

Lead # 4A

On a Northwest Airline jet, flight 428, forty passengers were evacuated from the plane. A landing tower employee at the La Crosse, Wisconsin airport spotted smoke near the wheels of the plane yesterday, following a flight from Minneapolis.


Top News Assignment # 2

According to a San Jose Mercury News article, a 15-year-old boy was stabbed to death in East San Jose Thursday night around 7:00 p.m. The police received a call stating that two young 15, and 16, were involved in a stabbing on Kollmar Drive and Story Road. Both victims identity has yet to be released.

This past Thursday’s homicide was the second killing in the past week. Unfortunately the motive for the stabbing is not known, but the city’s police department is working to bring these boys families’ closure. In my opinion, we all need to be aware of our surroundings and our young ones. People take things such as life for granted by taking other people’s lives. We seem to lose our faith in one another and that’s why so many deaths have been happening day after day.

This story is very important because its about the surroundings of local residents of San Jose, Ca. Not only do they reside here, but these are people’s children being affected. In this story it has the news values of impact and proximity and also immediacy/timeliness and emotion/ human interest.

Top News Assignment # 3

Mayor Chuck Reed of San Jose, Ca called on city workers Thursday to accept a 10 to 15 percent cut in pay and benefits to help fill a $100 million budget hole. According to San Jose Mercury News article “Unions so far have balked at more modest proposals to cut workers' compensation, even though city leaders have said the alternative would be hundreds of layoffs”. Due to the global recession San Jose’s ninth consecutive shortfall exceeds what the city spends on libraries and parks combined.

Reed told the crowd of 1,400 at the McEnery Convention Center that employee cost which account for two thirds of the operating budget, have shot up 64 percent in the past nine years, while revenues have climbed just 18 percent. This news article affects the lives of many local San Jose residents. The idea of a loss in pay physically puts a drain on the lives of those who are less fortunate.

I personally feel for these workers because I would hate for it to happen to me. The workers shouldn’t have to pay for something that’s going on in the city that didn’t involve them, but due to the recession it’s making living in America harder each day. The families of these workers depend on their pay checks to get the bills paid. The decrease in wage will affect many. The news values in this story would be values of impact and proximity. It also has the news value of immediacy/timeliness and emotions/human interest.

http://www.mercurynews.com/bay-area-news/ci_14427976

News Stories

News Story # 1
Lynn Rice, 74, of Norwalk in Los Angeles County, plowed her 1988 Cadillac through the front window of a convenient store yesterday evening. No one was injured.

After the crash, Rice tried to buy a six-pack of beer, but the cashier refused and instead called the police. Because of the state she was in, the store owner, Joe Awada, could not believe what he witnessed, saying, “I don’t know how she managed to walk”.

Due to a previous medical condition she was taken to the hospital for examination according to Lt. Han. She was then arrested for investigation of misdemeanor driving under the influence. She was released on a $ 15,000 bail, authorities said.

News Story # 2
Fact # 1

A construction truck barreled down a hill into a crowded grocery store parking lot in San Mateo today at 1:15 due to a mechanical failure according to San Mateo police Captain Kevin Nguyen. The truck hit a black sport-utility vehicle broadside. The impact dragged the SUV about 75 feet into the parking lot. About eight or nine other vehicles were hit as well.

One person was killed on the scene and three others were injured. None of the victims or the truck’s driver have been identified yet. This crash left the parking lot in a mess of crushed vehicles and broken glass.

Fact # 2

A motorist driving down Highway 1 at Devil’s Slide drove off a 150-foot cliff. The 24-year-old was driving his Mazda Sedan in dense fog today at 4:10 a.m.
The San Francisco motorist was heading north toward San Francisco, when he missed his turn and drove over the side of the cliff.

Luckily, the car landed on its wheels. The man was wearing his seat belt, and only suffered minor head injuries. He used his cell phone to call 911.

Rescue crews with the California Highway Patrol and Cal Fire had trouble locating the man because of the fog. When they finally reached him, 45 minutes later, he was taken to San Francisco General Hospital for observation.

According to CHP Sgt. Trent Ross, “ He did what he was suppose to do; he wore his seat beat” said Ross, who added that if the driver hadn’t been wearing his seat belt during the accident “ there is no doubt it would have been fatal”.

Exercise on pg 29.

After taking the Got What It Takes To Be A Reporter test I actually scored 28 which indicates that I'm a solid contender for a successful journalism career. The exercise actually helped me be more insightful. It somewhat gives me an better understanding to what to except in the near future regarding my career.

AP Style Exercise # 2

1) To ensure the accuracy of the news story, Susan Jones checked with her source. For Jones, this is an everyday practice, not the exception.

2) As the two boys argued over who should get the last piece of pizza, both seemed equally hungry. Clearly, they had forgotten their earlier decision to forgo having seconds.

3) He suspected his neighbor was selling drugs, so he called the FBI. His neighbor, however, cried foul at the accusation.

4) She grew up on the Great Plains, near Alliance, NE, where the winters are long and harsh and the living is hand-to- mouth.

5) Her car was sideswiped by a hit-and-run driver on route 1-A this morning. She wasn’t really injured, but the impact sent the contents of her purse helter-skelter.

Saturday, February 13, 2010

The Fog Index

In today’s religious society it has been said that the clash between Christianity and Homosexuality has become a major problem. The question that seems to be unanswered is whether or not it is a sin to be homosexual. The way that the society views homosexuals, has become very uncomfortable for many people. The fact that degradation is being allowed worries me the most. Homosexual are normal human being who just favor the same sex and shouldn’t be punished for their likings. Unfortunately it isn’t that simple and they too have to face the horrible reality called life. Combining homosexuality with Christianity causes thorough examination and personal opinion. Through concise research I have found that the incongruence between the two will forever be unknown. Although there is said to be some hope in changing the ways churches and Christians handle their opposition towards homosexuals, I feel that peace will never be held due the beliefs that Christians hold.

16+5=21/0-4=8.4


My index tells me that I need to work on my writing. I feel that the paper I chose to use wasnt one of my greatest papers. After learning exactly what the fog index is I now know how I can better improve the areas in which I'm slacking.

AP Style Exercise

1)Mayor Richard Wrigley expressed in confidence that the Gubernatorial Debate, which begins at 7:30 p.m. this evening, will have a positive effect on his candidacy. He added, “Governor Red Davidson is a master of dirty politics, but I won’t take any of his bologna.” (4)

2)For her birthday, the nine year old girl invited five good friends over for ice cream and cake. The chocolate cake was so tasty that any of the children would
have ate it all, but they carefully divided it between themselves. (4)

3)The new head of the Journalism Department, Dr. Deborah Dunwoody, Ph.D., recently bought a house at 6 Riverside Dr. in San Mateo, a city in San Francisco bay area. (4)

4)Rome, Italy – All around the world, Roman Catholics today listened as the pope delivered his homily. (3)

Lead # 3- 5

Lead # 3

San Mateo County coroner announced that the woman who was found last month died from an accidental drowning at the golf course.

34 year old Jessica Smythe of Pacifica, body was found in Sharp Park by a local hiker. According to San Mateo county coroner Robert Foster, believes that Smythe death was not accidental. Foster said that her death was "consistent with fresh water drowning, associated with probable hypothermia" Smyhte also had methamphetmines in her system at the time of her death.

Lead # 4A

Northwest Airline jet, flight 428 evacuated forty passengers.

A landing tower employee at the La Crosse, Wisconsin airport spotted smoke near the wheels of the plane yesterday, following a flight from Minneapolis.

Lead # 4B

On thursday night a seven year old boy who had been missing for three years was found in Brick Township, N.J. A neighbor recognized the child's picture when it was shown on t.v. after the movie Adam: The Song Continues, and she then called the police.

Lead # 5A
Immediate I.D
Chevy Chase, actor and comedian was appointed to the college's board of trustees yesterday at the Bard college, Annadale-on-Hudson, N.Y. His appointment was announced at an alumni dinner during Homecoming week.

Delayed I.D.

Duane La Chance, 55, a pipe fitter employed by Gross Engineers based in Springfield, suffered third-degree burns and was listed in serious condition Wednesday night in intensive care unit.

Around 3:00 Wednesday afternoon Duane La Chance was installing new pipes on the roof of the power plant when he accidental touched a power line carrying 15,000 volts with a piece of angle iron.

Top News Assignment # 2

According to a San Jose Mercury news article, thursday night around 7:00 pm a 15 year old boy was stabbed to death in East San Jose. The police recieved a call stating that two young men 15, and 16 were involved in a stabbing on Kollmar Drive and Story road. Both victims were taken to the hosiptal where the 15 year old was pronounced dead. The victims identity has yet to be released.This past thursdays homicide was the second killing in the past week. Unfortuantely the cause of the stabbing has not yet been developed, but the city's police department is doing the best that they can to bring these boys families closure. In my opinion I feel that we all need to be aware of our surroundings and our young ones. People take things such as life forgranted by taking other people lives, we seem to loose our faith in one another and thats why so many deaths have being happening day after after day.

This story is very important because its about the surrondings of local residents of San Jose, Ca. Not only do thousands of residents reside here in San Jose,but these are people children that are being affected and as you can see life threatening. This story is newsworhty because its a story that readers can personally connect themselves with. The story is very much compelling to its readers because innocent lives are being taken away on a daily basis and you never know it could be one of your own.

http://www.mercurynews.com/bay-area-news/ci_14387152

Friday, February 12, 2010

Revised Top News Assignment

Top News Assignment
After reading a New York Times article, I was very intrigued with what I read. The earthquake that hit Haiti a few weeks ago is continuing to grow extremely out of portion. The people of Haiti are suffering tremedously with not enough help and support to get them through this hardship being faced. Not only were homes taken away, but families were separated. Thousands of children have no home, no food to eat and not enough essentials to protect their health is available. Imagine, life with no running water, no clothes or shoes to protect the soles of our feet from broken glass and neddles, or not having a useful toilet to use the restroom in? Imagine 50 helpless children being crammed into two small bedrooms all using cardboard boxes to lay their heads on, can you vision the pain endured each and everyday? Its a horrible thought to encounter, but its an issue that need to be told.

The Foyer of Patience is where many of these children are orphanaged at. According to the article "They have no means to provide real schooling or basic medical care, so children spend their days engaged in mindless activities, and many die from treatable illnesses". Its very saddening to hear children spend days and nights living such as this. I wish there was something I could do to help make a difference in the lives of these kids who didnt ask for this to happen to them. Unfortuantely it has happened and we all have to find ways and solutions to make things better for their societies and families thats suffering.

In my opinion I feel that this story is newsworthy because it tocuhes many issues thats going on in the world today. It captures moments that shouldnt be avoided and neglected. This story affects everyone because it should prepare them in case an earthquake hit our country. Its not too long and establishes a compelling story to the readers in my opinion. The readers want to see themselves in the paper well I think if the envisioned themselves in Haiti its living proof that it can happen to anyone anywhere.
http://www.nytimes.com/2010/02/07/world/americas/07trafficking.html?pagewanted=1&hp

Revise Lead Exercise

Lead #1A

A earthquake with a preliminary magnitude of 2.2 hit Santa Clara County today around 8:33 this morning. According to U.S Geological Survey no injuries or damages reported, the epicenter was four miles deep and nine miles northwest of San Jose city hall.

Lead # 1B

Highway 9 was closed yesterday, several trees had fallen onto the roadway overnight due to the wind and rain. Caltrans crews closed the road inorder to clear the street up.

Lead # 2

131 passengers abroad a U.S Air jet were killed yesterday when a plane crashed outside Pittsburg while preparing to land.

Saturday, February 6, 2010

Top News Assignment

After reading a New York Times article, I was very intrigued with what I read. The earthquake that hit Haiti a few weeks ago is continuing to grow extremely out of portion. The people of Haiti are suffering tremedously with not enough help and support to get them through this hardship being faced. Not only were homes taken away, but families were separated. Thousands of children have no home, no food to eat and not enough essentials to protect their health is available. Imagine, life with no running water, no clothes or shoes to protect the soles of our feet from broken glass and neddles, or not having a useful toilet to use the restroom in? Imagine 50 helpless children being crammed into two small bedrooms all using cardboard boxes to lay their heads on, can you vision the pain endured each and everyday? Its a horrible thought to encounter, but its an issue that need to be told.

The Foyer of Patience is where many of these children are orphanaged at. According to the article "They have no means to provide real schooling or basic medical care, so children spend their days engaged in mindless activities, and many die from treatable illnesses". Its very saddening to hear children spend days and nights living such as this. I wish there was something I could do to help make a difference in the lives of these kids who didnt ask for this to happen to them. Unfortuantely it has happened and we all have to find ways and solutions to make things better for their societies and families thats suffering.

In my opinion I feel that this story is newsworthy because it tocuhes many issues thats going on in the world today. It captures moments that shouldnt be avoided and neglected. People in todays world complain about the minor issues affecting there life, but if we put our feet in the of the aftermath of this disasterous earthquake, I'm sure we wouldnt be complaining as much as before. I think we all need to embrace this terribly thing that has happened and apply it to our lives so that we know how to handle situations like this from happening to us even though nothing is promised.


http://www.nytimes.com/2010/02/07/world/americas/07trafficking.html?pagewanted=1&hp

Lead Excercise

Lead # 1

A small earthquake with a preliminary magnitude of 2.2 hit Santa Clara County today around 8:33 this morning. According to U.S Geological Survey no injuries or damages reported, but the quakes epicenter was four miles deep and nine miles northwest of San Jose City Hall.


Highway 9 was closed yesterday from 7:30am til 4:00pm. Several trees had fallen unto the roadway overnight due to the wind and rain. Caltrans crews closed the road inorder to clear the street up.

Lead # 2

One of the most disasterous plane crashes in the past 3 years, killed all 131 passengers who were on board yesterday's flight right outside Pittsburg.